Revising the 1Report assignment

Revising the 1Report assignment

            The revisions I will be doing on my draft of the 1919 Black Socks scandal will be focused on a few main spots. One of the areas I will focus on is tying my secondary information back into my source document. After reading through some of the sample papers I see I could have done more with the information I gathered. Some of the information I feel ties into the source document greatly is Jackson’s performance on the field.  Jackson’s testimony clearly talks about how he had the best average in the entire series and how he committed no errors in the field. His statistics from the entire series prove this almost to the dot. He was the only person in the entire series to hit a homerun and batted in 6 players. He even set a record for most hits in a World Series with 12. The meetings that occurred between the White Socks players and the gamblers is another point that connects quite well to the source document I was given. Joe Jackson stated in his confession he never went to the meetings with the ball players he only heard about them from other players such as Claude Williams. Although I am focused on the content part of my paper in my revising I will look at my grammar for mistakes.

My main revising will occur in the content area of my paper but the grammatical areas need some attention as well. Some of my bigger grammatical mistakes occur with my paragraph indenting and space. A couple times I moved onto another train of thought in the paper and forgot to start a new paragraph leaving in some cases paragraphs over a page in length. Those along with some misspellings are my only grammatical errors which will be easy to fix.